Below are some sentences. There might be one or more mistakes in the sentence or the sentences might be fine but you need to improve them.
In my opinion, I believe that studying history is extremely important in term of learning about culture, and science, medicine development.
On the one hand, history is a subject that is rarely used in people’s lives. Thus, it would be better to focus on science and technology, which is more relevant to the future.
In other word, they should use the school time effectively, because students are loosing the motivation to study subjects like history that has no important role in day to day life.
For instance, most people memorize dates,names and facts when they study history. This information is not useful for the future.
Furthermore, Valuable information can often be found in history, how science and medicine had developed over the years.
In conclusion, although history has many information that not used today, studying history is important for our present as will as for our future.
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In my opinion, I believe that studying history is extremely important in terms of learning about culture and the development of science and medicine. (The linking word “and” can be used to link items in a list as well as clauses.)
On the one hand, as history is a subject that is rarely used in people’s lives, it would be better to focus on science and technology, which is more relevant to the future. (Combine the sentences to make one complex structure. 33 words is a good length but don’t try for much more than that.)
In other words, school time should be used effectively because students are loosing the motivation to study subjects such as history that has no important role in day to day life. (Linking words.)
For instance, most people memorize dates, names and facts when they study history which is not considered useful information for the future. (Combine the sentences.)
Furthermore, valuable information can often be found in history which relates to how science and medicine has developed over the years. (Grammar: capital letters and tenses.)
In conclusion, although history has a lot of information that is not used in today’s life, studying history is still important for our present as well as for our future. (The main issues are grammar and writing the sentence so that it contains a more precise meaning.)
Linking Words: You can also see that a number of linking words have also been corrected. Linking words are easy to learn but students still make mistakes with forgetting the “s” or using non-academic linking words such as “like”. Make sure you all work on perfecting your linking.